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Post by AlbinoWhite1 Wed May 10, 2017 11:28 am

Name:Albino White
Alias:Albino
Age:12 (dragon years)
Gender:F
Sexuality: normal
Personality:very creative, a little weird, cunning, alarmed, nice, determined.
Interests: Life (like flowers, wildlife, etc.)
Dislikes: Fighting, humans, being lonely
Fears:Humans (reason is in my history)


Height: 12 Feet
Scales: white, grey (glows white in the dark)
Eyes: one brown, one blue

Tribe: is a loner since she escaped from the humans
Rank:Rouge/loner
Family: Unknown since the humans stole the egg
Mate:none
Hatchlings: none

Strengths: a little bit longer claws than the average hatchling, so she is able to climb and hang on to steep landscapes, buildings, etc. she also has keen eyesight.
Special Abilities: can surround herself with ice shards, flying to the nearest enemy (the shards not Albino). She can send a total of 5 ice shards around her. The shards can move speeds up to 20mph
Weakness: she is unaware of her weaknesses because she was trained by humans for most of her life but still here are her weaknesses:
Fire,Lighting,Poison
Combat Style:Unknown. Humans have trained her

History: she was a egg sitting on a nest. the mother decided to get some fish. when she was out of sight some humans stole the egg for the human king. so they raise the dragon and grew it. a few years later she had armor that the humans made for her for combat, but the king changed his mind to not train her for war, but to train her for dutys. she didnt know how to fly. and every night she was locked in a cold dark place, chained up. so one year later, albino had enough. somehow with her freezing powers, she made the chains frozen enough to break. she broken out of the place and escaped somehow in the night.


Last edited by AlbinoWhite1 on Wed May 17, 2017 6:46 am; edited 5 times in total (Reason for editing : fixing stuff)
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Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Wed May 10, 2017 4:08 pm

Awesome, you were able to post it. Now you need to do a little work on it. First, can you add a bit more detail to your personality?

You need one more dislike.

For your height you have 10-13ft. What is it exactly?

For strengths you have that her claws are longer than the average hatchling. How is this a strength? And you could use at least one more strength. Does she have any mental strengths? Same for weaknesses. In addition to fire, you could say she has no experience with anything because she has been a captive since birth.

Can you explain her special ability? When you say, "flying to the nearest enemy", do you mean Albino or the ice shards?

Let me know when you've made these chances and if you have any questions.

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Post by AlbinoWhite1 Thu May 11, 2017 7:19 am

ill fix it in a few mins Smile
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Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Thu May 11, 2017 2:00 pm

You still need to explain why her claws being longer than an average Hatchling's is a strength. What advantage does it give her?

Height: 10-13ft (about the size of an adult male) Do you mean an adult male Dragon? Because that is too tall for a Human. Also, again, what is her exact height: 10, 11, 12, or 13ft?

Under weakness you put: was trained by humans, weakness not known. What do you mean by that last part? That she is unaware of her weaknesses? Even if that is true, you still need to list all of her weaknesses; one should be her age and inexperience. And you should elaborate if you can. Why is her being trained by humans a weakness?
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Post by AlbinoWhite1 Fri May 12, 2017 6:29 am

okay. i have removed some stuff because there were getting a little confusing, like about the size of a adult male, but is this good now?
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Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Fri May 12, 2017 11:26 am

Looks good. One more thing, could use a little more detail with your special ability. How fast do the ice shards move and how many can you launch at an enemy at once? Keep in mind that since you're a Hatchling and also don't have much experience, you wouldn't be able to send more than 5.
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Post by AlbinoWhite1 Mon May 15, 2017 6:50 am

i fixed the bio Smile . is the numbers good?
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Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Mon May 15, 2017 11:41 am

5mph is actually too slow. You could bump it up to 15 or 20mph.
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Post by AlbinoWhite1 Wed May 17, 2017 6:46 am

fixed it Smile
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Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Wed May 17, 2017 4:07 pm

Looks good. Approved.
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