Dragons Roleplaying Forum
Hello! I greet all you guests warmly. Don't be scared, we won't bite! Us roleplayers are very active and have some experience. Our moderators and admins are always eager to help! We often hang out in the chatbox. So go on ahead, and join us today!

Log in

I forgot my password

Latest topics
» Aftermath (Starlights only)
by Destella Today at 3:54 pm

» Finding a Tribe (Icewings only)
by Snowblaze Today at 3:05 pm

» A Fortunate Paradox of Time [Private Full Gods]
by Kelarth Yesterday at 10:17 pm

» How to raise your dragons (Private Svad)
by Svadilfare Yesterday at 9:48 pm

» An introduction...
by Kryptic Yesterday at 5:55 pm

» Chance Meeting (Amore/Snowblaze)
by Snowblaze Yesterday at 11:00 am

» Rebuilding a Future [Private Kelarth/Wake]
by Wake Yesterday at 10:32 am

» Humans and Magic
by Wake Yesterday at 10:11 am

» This Pitiful Life [Private w/Tharasis]
by Tharasis Yesterday at 2:16 am

» Discoveries of a Forgotten World [Private w/ Orokiv]
by orokiv Fri Jul 20, 2018 11:18 pm

» Svadilfare, Pride of Kryo (Update)
by Celestia Fri Jul 20, 2018 11:11 pm

» Icy Reunion [Private Astral/Cassiopeia]
by Alyär Iris Iza Draekus Fri Jul 20, 2018 10:07 pm

» Youth and Experience [Private with Naviera]
by Mithridae Fri Jul 20, 2018 7:06 pm

» Witness to a Murder
by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Fri Jul 20, 2018 11:38 am

» the meeting(open to humans)
by darvik Thu Jul 19, 2018 9:32 pm

» The Dragon God and Goddesses Religions
by Shiera Thu Jul 19, 2018 6:31 pm

» Atlas' Game
by Kelarth Thu Jul 19, 2018 9:34 am

» Random Encounters (Open to All)
by orokiv Thu Jul 19, 2018 9:34 am

» My Choice (Wake)
by Súl Iolar Thu Jul 19, 2018 8:27 am

» darvik EDIT
by Shiera Wed Jul 18, 2018 7:58 am

» Family Unit (solo)
by malaki Tue Jul 17, 2018 9:17 pm

» Lets play pretend (private Paradox and Baldi)
by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Tue Jul 17, 2018 1:50 pm

» Wolves of Zamora
by Vasilios Mon Jul 16, 2018 5:27 pm

» Talon - The Teenage Rogue
by Baldirak Sapiens Draco Mon Jul 16, 2018 5:20 pm

» Wolves of Zamora
by Vasilios Mon Jul 16, 2018 4:14 pm

Quick Links


Contact Staff

Celestia: astral@rpgdragons.org

Who is online?
In total there are 6 users online :: 2 Registered, 0 Hidden and 4 Guests :: 1 Bot

darvik, Shiera

Most users ever online was 110 on Mon Jan 25, 2016 3:47 pm
Affiliates

Our Buttons:

Our Affiliates:

Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Page 1 of 3 1, 2, 3  Next

Go down

Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Tue Mar 22, 2016 10:17 am



Personal Info


Name:
Soulcry

Alias:
Soul

Age:
26.5 Years

Gender:
Male


Personality:
Soulcry is dualistic nightmare.  At his core he is a dark spirit, but its only masked with white through and through.  He is not inherently evil, but his core is a cancerous set of values and morals, which echo from his deepest darkest side from within.  His dark morality filters through a mask of pureness, but clouds his mood to sorrow often in doing so.  To stay upbeat, he has developed an obsurdly nonchallant, sarcastic expression as a result, however he often quickly dismisses others opions before they even will say them, though.  This makes him seem like a jerk, but this is because it is coming from a mind in a brutal struggle of dark and light.  Insightful, intelligent and cunning, he is blatantly sarcastic and defiant, though has an incredibly serious undertone that makes him seem very bold.  He is willful and assertive, as well as fearless and observant and alert, but he's also extremely mysterious and mischeivious.


Interests:
Magic, art, poetry, psychic development, paranormal phenomenon, and socializing


Dislikes:
Tempers, foolishness, dullness, and shallowness.

Fears: Isolation


General Appearance



Size: 36’11” long 13’ high

Scales: White, translucent scales covered by a fur of brilliant sheen.

Eyes: Indigo emanating a static electrical aura.

General Appearance: Pure white silver with an indigo and cyan glow.  High contrast, dark arms connected to his four wings.  A prominent, physical third eye.  A transparent body.  A flat, vertical tail with a phantom-like energy sphere at the tip of his tail.


Tribe Information and Status


Tribe: Rogue

Inheritence: 70% Skywing, 10% Icewing, 10% Nightwing, 10% Lightwing

Rank: Rogue

Family: Supposedly has a brother named Phase

Mate: Single

Hatchlings: N/A


Skills and Abilities


Strengths: He is intuitive equipped with a keen sense of vision he uses to scope out the feild and can focus on multiple targets.  He is evasive and elusive, with mostly skywing herritage he is quick and nimble and highly meneuvarable.  He is intentive about being stricken as little as possible.

Special Abilities:

-Storm Breath and Lighning:

From his mouth he can breathe cascading, spiraling lightning, sparkling with icy crystals.  The crystals are razor sharp, and the lightning emitted is accompanied by a dark vortex or cyclone that forces these crystals into extremely fast rotation.  It has a blasting effect on the opponent. The attack stretches up to 300 feet.  Although it loses its power over distance, it also widens.  It's his most powerful attack.  Can be used once every three posts.

-From his third eye, a more focused bolt of lightning can be shot.  Its not a cascade; rather it is a single, more narow bolt.  It is more accurate, though not quite as powerful.  It is high in contrast, dark and ultraviolet at its core and it beams brilliant white light.  As the appearance suggests it is both a lightwing and nightwing ability too.  It has an electrocuting effect. The bolt is dense, due to this fact it has a much shorter range of 120 feet.  Can be used on time per three posts.

(Both his attacks are powerful, and cannot be used together in a single post.  When one attack is used, the other attack must recharge.  They are both strong to waterwings.)

-Ultraviolet-Electrostatic Echolocation:

Like a radar, Soulcry uses his sixth sense to emit waves that penetrate haze, fog or smoke and even physical objects or pich dark to see.  Can be used every two posts for the durration of the post, and has a range of about 150 feet.


Weaknesses:

-His foreye is very sensitive to light and very susceptible and vulnerable to attacks.  

-His stomach is very soft and vulnerable, but not nearly as vulnerable as his eye.

-As a tiny part icewing he is slightly weak to fire based attacks.  He is also weak to Earthwing based attacks.

-In order to maintain his nimble speed and maneuverability, he is delecate and lightweight.

-His abilities all require time to recharge because they are so powerful.

-He has no resistances to the elements.

Combat Style: Soulcry is much better in the sky than on ground.  On ground he scurries if he feels overpowered, but is very confident if he shows himself in the air.  In the air he can evade and typically see anything with eyes like a hawk.  He tries to feel the pace of the battle as intuitively as possible, and usually stays at a medium to shorter distance away to strike opponent with lightning, in an attempt to make himself more accurate and powerful as well as distancing himself from his opponent when he is not offensive.

Background


History: As a child Soulcry and his brother Phase split in Nightwing territory.  Wheras his brother stayed, Soul fleed to skywing territory.  There he learned in school and eventually began fighting.  Unfortunately, though, after a combat once there, he was forced to leave skywing territory after accidentally killing another dragon in a fair fight.  He tries not to fight as often as possible anymore because of it.

RP Style: Soul solemnly draped his head over the cliff.  It was a long day for him, and he was heavily conflicted because of murder.  Two immense guardian dragons stood behind Soulcry, one of them spake.

“We should have you arrested,” said the guard.
“I know,” said Soul.
“Any last words before you leave this territory?”
And Soulcry leaned over the ledge a little more, and gazed at his daunting journey afore him.  He turned back at the guard who had spoken, gave a begrudging eye twitch and a remorseful snare, before leaping into the sky.

While he flew he had vivid flashbacks of being a child, and remembered how scary it was travelling away from his home.  He remembered all of his favorite moments of growing up at skywing territory with tears rolling down his eyes, until finally it sank deep how brutal of a baggage it was he had to live with.  And thus, Soul vanished into the horizon, where no one saw him from skywing territory again.




Last edited by Hydra on Fri Jun 24, 2016 12:07 pm; edited 115 times in total
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco on Tue Mar 22, 2016 4:39 pm

Your app needs to be posted on this site, Hydra. Please do that if you would like it to be reviewed.
avatar
Baldirak Sapiens Draco
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King

Male Scorpio Dog
Posts : 2083
Reputation : 76
Age : 23
Location : The TARDIS

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Wed Mar 23, 2016 12:00 pm

Blah


Last edited by Hydra on Wed Jun 22, 2016 11:47 am; edited 43 times in total (Reason for editing : Change)
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco on Wed Mar 23, 2016 12:55 pm

"His breath of fire is wicked hot." Unless he has FireWing heritage, he can't breathe fire.

"His nonphysical strength is very high too, withstanding high and low temperatures to an innumerable degree." I assume by nonphysical, you mean mental strength. This would have nothing to do with the mind, it is a physical strength. Also you would not be able to withstand extremely high or low temperatures unless you were a full blooded FireWing or IceWing, respectively.

"His tail if attacked will induce kundalini." You need to explain exactly what this is and how it empowers him.

"This dragon can breathe lightning and cast spells. He has the ability to see into the future, as well as project copies of himself and disrupt visually the surrounding field of vision. He can create shields to protect himself and his telepathy can span for miles."
You need to go into more detail with theses abilities and include weaknesses for them. What can Hydra see when he looks into the future and can he use this ability in combat? If so, that is not allowed. What kind of spells can he cast and for how long? It should cost him some energy to do this. How many copies of himself can he project at a time? It should cost him some energy to do this as well. How long can he disrupt someone's vision? How long does his shields last? Again, it should cost him energy to maintain if they were not easily destroyed. Finally, telepathy is not allowed unless you are a god.

Please fix these things and add more weaknesses.
avatar
Baldirak Sapiens Draco
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King

Male Scorpio Dog
Posts : 2083
Reputation : 76
Age : 23
Location : The TARDIS

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Wed Mar 23, 2016 12:59 pm

Fair enough, I will edit it. Would it be possible to become a God later? Suppose a God were to bless me? Jw
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco on Wed Mar 23, 2016 1:13 pm

I don't believe it would be possible to have telepathy even if a god granted it to you; you would have to be a god yourself. If at some later time you become a god, you can have the ability, it would just be limited depending on what kind of God you are (Demi, semi, full).
avatar
Baldirak Sapiens Draco
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King

Male Scorpio Dog
Posts : 2083
Reputation : 76
Age : 23
Location : The TARDIS

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Wed Mar 23, 2016 1:15 pm

Nonphysical as in "special" like Pokemon, by the way
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco on Wed Mar 23, 2016 4:08 pm

Okay, so...

The amount of copies he can project should be cut down. Being able to project up to 50 of these in 1on 1 combat would be overpowering. The being able to disrupt one's vision, are they still able to see or would they be blind? Also how do you do this? How are your shields weak against physical attacks but are able to defend against fire and special abilities? Fire breath is a physical attack. What kinds of abilities specifically can they defend against?

"He is capable of using a powerful gravity which will ground the opponent if they are in the air." This is overpowering and should be removed.

You've stated that if his tail is attacked, his energy will become extremely high, and increase more each time it happens. This seems overpowered to me, because you could use your spells and other abilities more than the 11 times or at least make them more powerful. There should be a side-effect to this, and the amount of energy received should be cut down.

I didn't notice this before, but you make no mention of having SkyWing heritage, therefore you can't have lightning breath, unless you add some SkyWing heritage. However, this would make you a quarter SkyWing, meaning your lightning breath wouldn't be very effective against full or half-blood SkyWings.


You have mentioned in combat style that he can cover his head with a psychic shield in order to headbutt someone and that it cracks or shatters after three hits. First, this should be under abilities, but I don't believe this is an ability you can have unless you are at least a demi-god, so remove this.
avatar
Baldirak Sapiens Draco
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King

Male Scorpio Dog
Posts : 2083
Reputation : 76
Age : 23
Location : The TARDIS

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 9:52 am

Alright I updated what you said
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Baldirak Sapiens Draco on Thu Mar 24, 2016 11:18 am

One last thing. Being only part FireWing and SkyWing, any abilities you have related to those species are weaker than a full blooded FireWing or SkyWing. I see you have made your fire breath weak against other FireWings, that's good. Now you must do the same for your SkyWing abilities. Your lightning breath should be weak against other SkyWings. You would be able to fly fast but not at supersonic speed. Just these two things remain and then I will accept your app.
avatar
Baldirak Sapiens Draco
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King
Grand Champion Y1 Earthwing King

Male Scorpio Dog
Posts : 2083
Reputation : 76
Age : 23
Location : The TARDIS

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 12:41 pm

Alright those changes have been made.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Sly on Thu Mar 24, 2016 3:08 pm

Please add more weaknesses or limitations to your ability to replicate 10 times. Due to what they do and what they can potentially do (due to vagueness), you will either need to weaken your clones significantly or increase the energy cost.

Please specify that your lightning and speed are weaker and slower than that of pure Skywings.

_______________________
Sly's theme. Enjoy!

Spoiler:
avatar
Sly
NightWing Healer
NightWing Healer

Male Posts : 618
Reputation : 15
Location : Australia

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 3:18 pm

After a discussion in chats, I was going to do this but I forgot. Thanks for reminding me.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 4:27 pm

I have a feeling you won't accept it with the ability to shapeshift into a bolt of lightning.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 5:03 pm


What it looks like when he disrupts the field of vision.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Sly on Thu Mar 24, 2016 6:02 pm

Shapeshifting into a bolt of lightning can be perceived as a form of teleporting. As such, it won't pass unfortunately. Additionally, converting your body from mass to energy makes you invincible for that duration, and therefore far too overpowered.

_______________________
Sly's theme. Enjoy!

Spoiler:
avatar
Sly
NightWing Healer
NightWing Healer

Male Posts : 618
Reputation : 15
Location : Australia

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 6:07 pm

*wondering if this would be possible if I became a Demi.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 7:10 pm

Officially updated again.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 7:12 pm

Wait lemme add a weakness.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Thu Mar 24, 2016 7:27 pm

Okay.... Now it's done.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Sly on Thu Mar 24, 2016 9:54 pm

APPROVED

_______________________
Sly's theme. Enjoy!

Spoiler:
avatar
Sly
NightWing Healer
NightWing Healer

Male Posts : 618
Reputation : 15
Location : Australia

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Celestia on Thu Mar 24, 2016 11:06 pm

"As 7% Nightwing he has a dark side to him."


Anywho UNAPPROVED. You have nearly the full capabilities of every tribe you have in your blood. And venom isn't even a NightWing unique thing. Venom is unique to the EarthWings. With the amount of control you have over electricity and your immense speed I would reject every benefit you get from the other tribes you have in your blood. I mean heck 360 mph is near the fastest the fastest full blooded SkyWing can go and that's if their only ability was speed.

I neither know if you are immune to all the tribe elements or are totally susceptible to all of them. This needs to be included and needs to be severe seeing how sever your abilities are.

Speaking of weaknesses you have none. In the weaknesses are you simply explained the limitations of your abilities. That belongs in the special abilities area with your special abilities while as the weaknesses area needs actually weaknesses of your character.

"(Flip 3 coins each, 6 total, best 4 out of 6, if it's three to three, flip a seventh)"
Any abilities that rely on chance is a no go as we have no way to verify it. The only way it would work is the roll was hosted by our site's randomizer and that is not going to happen.

20 years old is too young to have a proficient knowledge of magic especially when considered with the rest of your characters abilities.

While not a requirement I would advise expanding on your characters personality and history as this is looking like a mery sue character that is defined by their abilities. You will find yourself enjoying your rp here more, relevant to the amount of effort you stick into your character's character.

_______________________


Quotes:
[15:53:21] Apolis : Yes, semi gods shall be treated with the uttermost respect of course!
Gala: UNLEASH THE FURY OF THE NIGHT!
[00:33:27] Abyss : Happy coming outta yer mum day~
[01:31:17] XaJjang : 90% of this site's "Metagaming" or "Powerplaying" is the opposite.
[01:31:26] XaJjang : It's jsut really badly worded posted, or jsut bad posts in general.
avatar
Celestia
NightWing Hatchling
NightWing Hatchling

Female Scorpio Dog
Posts : 1418
Reputation : 44
Age : 23
Location : I have no idea where I am.

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Soulcry on Fri Mar 25, 2016 10:12 am

Okay, but admit it. The art is cool.

_______________________
avatar
Soulcry

Male Aquarius Pig
Posts : 85
Reputation : 13
Age : 23
Location : Atlantis

View user profile http://scyxer.tumblr.com/post/132551486339

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Soulcry on Fri Mar 25, 2016 10:13 am

I think I want to be a rogue anyways.

_______________________
avatar
Soulcry

Male Aquarius Pig
Posts : 85
Reputation : 13
Age : 23
Location : Atlantis

View user profile http://scyxer.tumblr.com/post/132551486339

Back to top Go down

Re: Soulcry, the Atmosphere Dragon

Post by Midnight on Fri Mar 25, 2016 12:51 pm

I just thought it went without saying that his fire and lightning abilities would be reduced, but also consider if they could be slightly in between 56%+36% since they have a small seed of either within their effects.
avatar
Midnight
NightWing Guardian
NightWing Guardian

Aquarius Pig
Posts : 127
Reputation : 2
Age : 23

View user profile

Back to top Go down

Page 1 of 3 1, 2, 3  Next

Back to top

- Similar topics

 
Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum